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No.3   投稿者:メンコ   投稿日:2012-07-20 07:30:48   ID:dUJVXTU3/f.
ほとんどの登場人物が短絡的・好戦的な言動なのが、強い違和感を覚えました。
感想返しで言及されておりますが、本分での描写が著しく不足しているため「こっちはちゃんと考えてるんだよ」とも取れる、いかにもとってつけたような主張に見えます。
この二作品を敢えてクロスさせた意義や理由などいろいろと考察できるのですが、それを描く文章が足りない、具体的には場面展開時の台詞や地の文の質・量が少なすぎるように思えます。

No.2   投稿者:シュウ   投稿日:2012-07-19 21:20:54   ID:4BdgpqIkjdA
>>なんかこう・・・凄い違和感を感じました。
特に刹那が異様に好戦的なのがひっかかります。
劇場版ダブルオーの刹那は、既に『真のイノベイター』として覚醒しており、戦闘よりも対話を優先するはず。
にもかかわらず、問答無用とばかりに襲い掛かるのはどうなんでしょう?


ご指摘ありがとうございます。自分の中では、「エヴァの存在を危険視し、あれはあってはならないものだ」と刹那が感じた部分を表現しています。自分もどうかと思いましたが、結局そのままこの意見で通してしまいました。誠に申し訳ございません。次回からは本格的な戦闘シーンを用意するつもりですが、相手が相手なので、対話は通じないと思っています。ですが、できるだけ原作に近づけるよう努力いたします。アドバイスとして受け取らせていただきます。ありがとうございました。

No.1   投稿者:レッスル   投稿日:2012-07-19 20:39:08   ID:Kf9s3H9ikhs
なんかこう・・・凄い違和感を感じました。
特に刹那が異様に好戦的なのがひっかかります。
劇場版ダブルオーの刹那は、既に『真のイノベイター』として覚醒しており、戦闘よりも対話を優先するはず。
にもかかわらず、問答無用とばかりに襲い掛かるのはどうなんでしょう?

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